Ch 3 - P 14
10th Jun 2019, 5:40 PM in CHAPTER THREE
Ch 3 - P 14
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Bandkanon
even more proud of this page than the last. ha.

too bad i feel like it's somewhat TOO dark compared to the last few of this chapter. Consistency would be nice.

Oh well. Not much progression, but a sense of movement and not so terrible pictures. So that's all good.

Comments

MK_Wizard | 10th Jun 2019, 5:49 PM
MK_Wizard
I absolutely love the way you drew the ruins!
Bandkanon | 18th Jun 2019, 7:33 PM
Bandkanon
thanks~ I'm glad it actually comes across as ruins lol
A lot of stuff like the rubble and spiderwebs came as a bit of an afterthought, honestly. Without, it really didn't look 'ruined' at all but just like a dark mansion...
warp9 | 11th Jun 2019, 2:00 AM
warp9
Very nice work!
Bandkanon | 18th Jun 2019, 7:34 PM
Bandkanon
Thanks as always!
SoraMaroon | 13th Jun 2019, 10:43 PM
Oooooh, I really love the architecture and details in there!!!! I love how you capture the atmosphere.
Bandkanon | 18th Jun 2019, 7:35 PM
Bandkanon
fun fact: stairs are hard. There are stairs all over the place in this chapter. It's driving me nuts.
E-hero Vulven | 16th Jun 2019, 9:44 PM
E-hero Vulven
Your art is gorgeous. I played FF9, one of the few FF games I actually done. These are "literally who" OCs and the plot is kinda slow. Guess the pacing for this type of non-action tale and the subdued designs are keeping me from being hooked. imo, I'd be more engaged if the kids were old enough to fight monsters and go on FF style adventures. Now, I didn't fully read every page but it'd be cool to include more characters from the game; I think I saw a couple but nothing exciting occurred. Yeah, I liked FF9.
Bandkanon | 18th Jun 2019, 7:24 PM
Bandkanon
If you didn't actually read it then why are you even leaving this comment

I welcome constructive criticism but this is not constructive in the slightest. This isn't even criticism. It's just whining that something isn't immediately tailored to appease your short attention span.

This story obviously isn't made for you. There are others out there that are. Go read something else and don't leave comments like this.
E-hero Vulven | 18th Jun 2019, 8:38 PM
E-hero Vulven
The first sentence of my post was not negative. I am not being mean, just giving an unfiltered honest opinion after giving your work a skim. If that is how you choose to react then I will stop as you wish. You're free to correct me about my conclusions of the story so far you know.
Bandkanon | 18th Jun 2019, 10:48 PM
Bandkanon
1) one positive sentence does not make up for a wave of obvious negativity. (bracketed by 'yea i like ff9' which i mean-- cool, welcome to the club, but that still doesn't give you a free pass to be an asshole.)

2) I didn't ask whether you were being 'mean' or not, but now I don't believe you. (PS: The phrase "Literally Who" is literally an insult. It is designed with the intention to be insulting. Look it up. Use Google.)

3) Do not skim&critique. That's always a bad idea. Always. A bad. Idea.

4) I did not 'choose to react' to anything. You do realize that's the exact wording people generally use when they don't want to admit that they did something wrong, right?

5) Gaiden [JP] (外伝, pronounced [ɡaideɴ])
"Side-story" or "tale". Usually an anecdote or a supplementary memoir. Often used in Japanese fiction to describe a spin-off of a previous work.

6) This story is about Alleyway Jack, who is a canon character. Enkido is also canon. There will be OCs because the world of Gaia is not pint sized, and it does not revolve around any of the protagonists. Some other canon characters will eventually show up, but it will be a while til then and even then they will not take center stage. Might I repeat: it is about ALLEYWAY JACK

7) The pacing fluctuates organically from arc to arc. It starts off slow because it was designed to be that way. Also I don't like jumping into combat without any build-up at all, especially not in the first few chapters. This story has a heavy focus on mystery and exploration, and though action is there it does not take top priority. Why are you even complaining about pacing anyway? You didn't even read it.

8) what in god's name do you mean by 'subdued designs'
Wait no don't answer that
I don't want to hear it.
Just-- for future reference, in case you ever choose to comment in such a manner on other peoples' comics, please work on your wording
Let this be all.
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